Hey Andrew! I am glad to see you here, hope you are doing well!
So after a first listen, here is my take:
- I feel like the instrumentation is buried behind your vocals, which are extremely layered but a bit too much maybe.
- Your guitar tone, and that's on a personal note, has maybe a bit too much drive going on and would benefit by being ''cleaner'' or perhaps have a softer drive that would add just a little bite without muddying too much your tone!
All said and done, I still think it's great that you did this because you gain experience from it and what comes next might just be even better! Good luck!