Lyrics Question
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Let me write a song.
Doom or Victory?
(songwriter: E. John)
Intro:
Across that field lies an army
Hungry and vast, ready to strike
They know history is waiting
Shall we oblige?
Verse:
We are few, they are many
But we fight for freedom, for our very homes.
What do they fight for?
Glory, a vain emotion.
Chorus:
And on this day we'll fight
I swear, with all of Gods might
We'll shock their men's right
and make them tremble with fright
Verse 2:
Our country is at risk
Her very existance
Is freedom with us?
Or at the whim of a master?
No, I think not.
(Chorus repeats)
Verse 3:
By god we'll give them hell
I promise you this
The end will come for one of us
And I promise it wont be us.
(Chorus)
Doom or Victory?
(songwriter: E. John)
Intro:
Across that field lies an army
Hungry and vast, ready to strike
They know history is waiting
Shall we oblige?
Verse:
We are few, they are many
But we fight for freedom, for our very homes.
What do they fight for?
Glory, a vain emotion.
Chorus:
And on this day we'll fight
I swear, with all of Gods might
We'll shock their men's right
and make them tremble with fright
Verse 2:
Our country is at risk
Her very existance
Is freedom with us?
Or at the whim of a master?
No, I think not.
(Chorus repeats)
Verse 3:
By god we'll give them hell
I promise you this
The end will come for one of us
And I promise it wont be us.
(Chorus)
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I can definitely tell cause although it tells a story there isnt luch of a scheme cept for the chorus. I guess that's how popular music works though right.. catchy chorus. That's what everyone remembers.
I always try to add some of scheme in the verse too. And the bridge. I feel the bridge is probably the climax for the lyrics where you really wanna get your point out there. And if you can make that rhyme and poetic.. you'll get a good pat on the back.
With that said though it's not bad.. I wanna hear the music behind this song.
I always try to add some of scheme in the verse too. And the bridge. I feel the bridge is probably the climax for the lyrics where you really wanna get your point out there. And if you can make that rhyme and poetic.. you'll get a good pat on the back.
With that said though it's not bad.. I wanna hear the music behind this song.
I get what you mean, but I don't think that lyrics don't really have to rhyme, plus, its intentionally vague.I can definitely tell cause although it tells a story there isnt luch of a scheme cept for the chorus. I guess that's how popular music works though right.. catchy chorus. That's what everyone remembers.
I always try to add some of scheme in the verse too. And the bridge. I feel the bridge is probably the climax for the lyrics where you really wanna get your point out there. And if you can make that rhyme and poetic.. you'll get a good pat on the back.
With that said though it's not bad.. I wanna hear the music behind this song.
If you want to prove that you can do better, then by all means, post.
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"I'm through with standin' in lines to clubs I'll never get in
It's like the bottom of the ninth and I'm never gonna win"
I,
I am a man
Who gets lost sometimes
But I don't know when
I,
Don't know where
I am supposed to go
So I stay right there
I am so lost right now
So please show me how
I don't
Know which way to go
I'm at a crossroads
And the signs don't show
I am so lost right now
So please show me how
I need to take a right
Or maybe a left, I can't see in the night
I think
I can find my way
If the signs show
On a brighter day
I am not lost right now
I think I know how
I think I need to take a right
The signs start coming in my sight
What I like to do is choose a general theme or topic for the album. I think this falls under concept album theory.
Generally, I would like all my songs to be somewhat related, like chapters from a book. Each song builds on what the previous ones have established.
I find it easier this way because topics spring to mind more easily.
As for rhymes, to each his own. I like my lyrics to rhyme, but I don't see it as a necessity.
Generally, I would like all my songs to be somewhat related, like chapters from a book. Each song builds on what the previous ones have established.
I find it easier this way because topics spring to mind more easily.
As for rhymes, to each his own. I like my lyrics to rhyme, but I don't see it as a necessity.
I could find a bunch of examples where poetry follows a specific rhyme scheme if youd like.. theres different types of poetry.
Here's a site explaining 10 different ones to start. All 10 are continuous patterns and they dont change or are just two rhymes like you said.
With thay said the poem you wrote is also valid. As I said. There are many different ways to make a poem.
We havent even gotten into the syllable counts. That's a whole another ball game.
With thay said the poem you wrote is also valid. As I said. There are many different ways to make a poem.
We havent even gotten into the syllable counts. That's a whole another ball game.
Just cause the pattern isnt in those 10 examples doesn't mean the pattern does not exist.
I love how there's Nickelback in every forum 
Every time I feel bad I write things. It helps me to relax and then I can make a song with it. Write about true feelings. True words. Don't try to sound fancy or to impress people. Write true things and that will always work and will always be great
Every time I feel bad I write things. It helps me to relax and then I can make a song with it. Write about true feelings. True words. Don't try to sound fancy or to impress people. Write true things and that will always work and will always be great
