Lyrics Question

Edward John · Feb 8, 2020

ChadTheAlmightyGodofKings said:
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I got your 'Back Chad.

Edward John · Feb 8, 2020

Let me write a song.
Doom or Victory?
(songwriter: E. John)
Intro:
Across that field lies an army
Hungry and vast, ready to strike
They know history is waiting
Shall we oblige?
Verse:
We are few, they are many
But we fight for freedom, for our very homes.
What do they fight for?
Glory, a vain emotion.
Chorus:
And on this day we'll fight
I swear, with all of Gods might
We'll shock their men's right
and make them tremble with fright
Verse 2:
Our country is at risk
Her very existance
Is freedom with us?
Or at the whim of a master?
No, I think not.
(Chorus repeats)
Verse 3:
By god we'll give them hell
I promise you this
The end will come for one of us
And I promise it wont be us.
(Chorus)

Calvin Phillips · Feb 8, 2020

Edward John said:
Let me write a song.
Doom or Victory?
(songwriter: E. John)
Intro:
Across that field lies an army
Hungry and vast, ready to strike
They know history is waiting
Shall we oblige?
Verse:
We are few, they are many
But we fight for freedom, for our very homes.
What do they fight for?
Glory, a vain emotion.
Chorus:
And on this day we'll fight
I swear, with all of Gods might
We'll shock their men's right
and make them tremble with fright
Verse 2:
Our country is at risk
Her very existance
Is freedom with us?
Or at the whim of master?
No, I think not.
(Chorus repeats)
Verse 3:
By god we'll give them hell
I promise you this
The end will come for one of us
And I promise it wont be us.
(Chorus)

Is this back lyrics?

Edit.. I see it now. Did you just write this?

Calvin Phillips · Feb 8, 2020

I can definitely tell cause although it tells a story there isnt luch of a scheme cept for the chorus. I guess that's how popular music works though right.. catchy chorus. That's what everyone remembers.

I always try to add some of scheme in the verse too. And the bridge. I feel the bridge is probably the climax for the lyrics where you really wanna get your point out there. And if you can make that rhyme and poetic.. you'll get a good pat on the back.

With that said though it's not bad.. I wanna hear the music behind this song.

Edward John · Feb 8, 2020

Calvin Phillips said:
I can definitely tell cause although it tells a story there isnt luch of a scheme cept for the chorus. I guess that's how popular music works though right.. catchy chorus. That's what everyone remembers.

I always try to add some of scheme in the verse too. And the bridge. I feel the bridge is probably the climax for the lyrics where you really wanna get your point out there. And if you can make that rhyme and poetic.. you'll get a good pat on the back.

With that said though it's not bad.. I wanna hear the music behind this song.

I get what you mean, but I don't think that lyrics don't really have to rhyme, plus, its intentionally vague.

Calvin Phillips · Feb 8, 2020

Edward John said:
I get what you mean, but I don't think that lyrics don't really have to rhyme, plus, its intentionally vague.

They don't it's a matter of personal opinion

idssdi · Feb 8, 2020

Edward John said:
Let me write a song.
Doom or Victory?
(songwriter: E. John)
Intro:
Across that field lies an army
Hungry and vast, ready to strike
They know history is waiting
Shall we oblige?
Verse:
We are few, they are many
But we fight for freedom, for our very homes.
What do they fight for?
Glory, a vain emotion.
Chorus:
And on this day we'll fight
I swear, with all of Gods might
We'll shock their men's right
and make them tremble with fright
Verse 2:
Our country is at risk
Her very existance
Is freedom with us?
Or at the whim of master?
No, I think not.
(Chorus repeats)
Verse 3:
By god we'll give them hell
I promise you this
The end will come for one of us
And I promise it wont be us.
(Chorus)

I honestly hate it when to many sentences have ending rhyme, it's just too same same

Edward John · Feb 8, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
I honestly hate it when to many sentences have ending rhyme, it's just too same same

If you want to prove that you can do better, then by all means, post.

Calvin Phillips · Feb 8, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
I honestly hate it when to many sentences have ending rhyme, it's just too same same

That's poetry.

Dominik Gräber · Feb 8, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
I honestly hate it when to many sentences have ending rhyme, it's just too same same

"I'm through with standin' in lines to clubs I'll never get in
It's like the bottom of the ninth and I'm never gonna win"

idssdi · Feb 8, 2020

Calvin Phillips said:
That's poetry.

No it's not, two sentences should rhyme more is just cringy. No poetry works like that

idssdi · Feb 8, 2020

Edward John said:
If you want to prove that you can do better, then by all means, post.

I,
I am a man
Who gets lost sometimes
But I don't know when

I,
Don't know where
I am supposed to go
So I stay right there

I am so lost right now
So please show me how

I don't
Know which way to go
I'm at a crossroads
And the signs don't show

I am so lost right now
So please show me how
I need to take a right
Or maybe a left, I can't see in the night

I think
I can find my way
If the signs show
On a brighter day

I am not lost right now
I think I know how
I think I need to take a right
The signs start coming in my sight

idssdi · Feb 8, 2020

Edward John said:
Fond of I's, aren't you?

I write in The George Harrison way, it's pretty inward

Edward John · Feb 8, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
I write in The George Harrison way, it's pretty inward

Well, I am a fan of George.

Andrew Milner · Feb 10, 2020

What I like to do is choose a general theme or topic for the album. I think this falls under concept album theory.

Generally, I would like all my songs to be somewhat related, like chapters from a book. Each song builds on what the previous ones have established.

I find it easier this way because topics spring to mind more easily.

As for rhymes, to each his own. I like my lyrics to rhyme, but I don't see it as a necessity.

Calvin Phillips · Feb 10, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
No it's not, two sentences should rhyme more is just cringy. No poetry works like that

I could find a bunch of examples where poetry follows a specific rhyme scheme if youd like.. theres different types of poetry.

Calvin Phillips · Feb 10, 2020

Here's a site explaining 10 different ones to start. All 10 are continuous patterns and they dont change or are just two rhymes like you said.

https://www.masterclass.com/articles/what-is-a-rhyme-scheme-learn-about-10-different-poetry-rhyme-schemes#what-is-a-rhyme-scheme-in-poetry

With thay said the poem you wrote is also valid. As I said. There are many different ways to make a poem.

We havent even gotten into the syllable counts. That's a whole another ball game.

idssdi · Feb 10, 2020

Calvin Phillips said:
I could find a bunch of examples where poetry follows a specific rhyme scheme if youd like.. theres different types of poetry.

Rhyming is not the problem having four sentences where it is based around the same thing isnt. ABAB, AABB is all in poetry, AAAA isn't. At least that's what teachers taught me

Calvin Phillips · Feb 10, 2020

Ids Schiere said:
Rhyming is not the problem having four sentences where it is based around the same thing isnt. ABAB, AABB is all in poetry, AAAA isn't. At least that's what teachers taught me

Just cause the pattern isnt in those 10 examples doesn't mean the pattern does not exist.

Rute Rodrigues · Feb 11, 2020

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Every time I feel bad I write things. It helps me to relax and then I can make a song with it. Write about true feelings. True words. Don't try to sound fancy or to impress people. Write true things and that will always work and will always be great

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